原创版:
这是一个非常有趣的场景,一个穿着饶舌歌手的人挥舞着一张重达100万英镑的钞票。作者马克吐温写这种有趣和愚蠢的情况,让人们笑。如果你给一个聪明和诚实的人用一张大面值钞票挣扎着贫穷,他能住在伦敦吗?他会怎么做?两个兄弟做了一个赌注,然后他们迅速购买了可以从一家银行使用的唯一一张百万张钞票,并将其发送给他们选择的亨利。然而,钞票的价格很高,以致没有人有足够的改变来偿还,人们认为亨利只是一个奇怪的百万富翁,并且自由地向他出售货物。白天,亨利认为他可能在做白日梦,但是到了晚上,他很难入睡,因为他知道那张纸不是他的。然而,他因钱而出名,然后他可以与最光荣的人一起参加晚宴。在聚会中,亨利遇到了他的女孩波西亚。她终于成了他的妻子。显然,他意识到她是兄弟的女儿之一。亨利终于赢得了他的账单20万。这个着名的戏剧性的法案在亨利和波西亚婚礼当天在家中最神圣的地方被吊死。
这个故事中最有趣和最有趣的部分是描述那些在看到账单之前鄙视他的人,以及在了解账单后他们看起来似乎是什么。四年级时,这些部分放在我的中文书中。这就是我非常喜欢这个故事的原因之一。
当我读到马克吐温的文章时,我记得“尴尬”一词。马克吐温激励人们,发生了一些事情。他的故事中的人总是“尴尬”。他们可能会被金钱和名望所吸引,愚蠢而无知。大部分你必须嘲笑那些栩栩如生的人!
原创版:
It's a very funny scene that a person who was dressed in raps waved one banknote which worthed one million pound. The author Mark Twain write about this kind of funny and stupid circumstances which makes people laugh. If you give a clever and honest person who had struggling in poverty with a large denomination bank note, will he able to live in London? How will he do? Two brothers made a bet, then they quickly bought the only million bank note can used from a bank and sent it to Henry, the person they chose. However the price of the bank note was to high that nobody have enough change to pay back, people considered Henry is just a strange millionaire and sell goods to him freely. During the day, Henry thought he may be in a daydream, but at night, he can hardly fall asleep because he knew the note wasn't his. However, he became famous by his money, then he can take part in the dinner party with the most honorable people. In the party, Henry met his girl Pocia. She became his wife at last. Dramatically, he realized that she is one of the brothers' daughter. Henry finally earned 200 thousand by his bill. This famous, dramatically bill were hanged on the most holy place at home on the wedding day for Henry and Pocia.
The most funny and amusing part of the story is the description of people those who despised him before seeing the bill and what they seemed after knowing about the bill. These parts were put in my Chinese Book when I was in grade four. That is one of the reasons why I love the story so much.
When I read about Mark Twain's articles, I remember a word "embarrassed". Mark Twain stire people and some thing happened. People in his stories are always " embarrassed". They may be attracted by money and fame, stupid and ignorant. Most of the you must laugh at those lifelike people!
老师修改版:
It was a very hilarious scene that a person dressed in rags waved one banknote of one million pound. The author Mark Twain wrote about this kind of funny and witty circumstances which make people laugh. If you give a clever and honest person who had strugged in poverty with a large bank note, will he be able to survive in London? How will he do it while he could not explain this bill is his? Henry Adams found himself poor and penniless in London after boating accident swept him overboard. Pitying him, two brothers give him an envelope, and it turns out inside was a million pound bank note. They made a bet. Brother B believed that the possession of this banknote, or symbol of wealth, would allow him to survive for a month. In the envelope, the brothers made clear that a bet was made on Henry, and if he helped them complete the bet, he would win a job. However, brother A believed the bank note will be useless because he will not be able to exchange the note for cash. For example, he realized that he would nof be able to easily exchange it without being questioned how he received the note, leading to a potential arrest due to theft. In fact, the price of the bank note was too high that nobody had enough change to pay it back. When he brings the million pound bank note to the restaurant, the manager feels sorry for him because he has no change and gives him the meal for free. Finally, in an act of desperation, he decided to see if he can use the note to exchange his rags for a cheap suit. When he pulls out the million pound note to pay, the store manager gives him the entire wardrobe on credit. People considered Henry just a strange millionaire and sold goods to him freely. During the day, Henry thought he might be in a daydream. At night, he could hardly fall asleep because he knew the note wasn't his. Ultimately, he becomes a celebrity in London as the "vest pocket million-pounder". At the party, Henry met a girl named Pocia. At the end of the story, she became his wife at last. Dramatically, he also realized that she is one of the brothers' daughter. Finally, Henry earned 200 thousand through his investments. This famous, dramatical bill were hung on the most holy place at home on the Henry and Pocia's wedding day.
The most funny and amusing part of the story is the description of people who looked down him before seeing the bill and how they behave after knowing about the bill. It seems as though people's personality and behavior around him changed simply because of the presence of wealth, which is what Brother B bet. These parts were included in my Chinese text when I was in fourth grade. That is one of the reasons why I love the story so much.
When I read about Mark Twain's stories, I always think about a word "embarrassed". Mark Twain critiques people and some clever and eccentric thing happened. People in his stories are always " embarrassed". They may be attracted by money and fame, but at the end of the day, stupid and igno.rant. For example, the owner of the restaurant and stores are embarrassed because they were rude to Henry before seeing the banknote. You must laugh at those lifelike people!
老师评语:
Today Chassie and I discussed her book analysis on Mark Twain's short story, One Million Pound Bank Note. While her essay was nearly free of grammatical errors, we mainly worked on including more details about the actual story, including the character progression, the character's interactions with other characters in the book, and the narrative arc. Don't be afraid to include as many details as possible, as it will definitely engage your audience and keep them in the loop about the story progression. We also worked on the transitions between different sentences to improve the fluidity of the entire essay and show the movement of Mark Twain's story. Great job!
这次作文闺女准备不充分,老师改动添加的内容比较多,特分开存放,仔细体会学习下。
老师修改版:
一个人是一个非常热闹的场景 身着碎布挥舞着一百万英镑的一张钞票。作者马克吐温写过这种有趣而机智的情节,让人们笑起来。如果你给一个聪明和诚实的人用一张大钞票在贫困中挣扎,他能在伦敦生存吗?他怎么会这样做,而他无法解释这个法案是他的?亨利亚当斯在划船事故席卷了他的船后,发现自己身无分文,身无分文。怜悯他,两个兄弟给了他一个信封,结果里面是一百万英镑的钞票。他们下注了。B弟兄认为,拥有这张钞票或财富的象征将使他能够存活一个月。在信封中,兄弟俩明确表示对亨利打赌,如果他帮助他们完成赌注,他会赢得一份工作。然而,兄弟A相信钞票是无用的,因为他不能将钞票换成现金。例如,他意识到他不会轻易地交换它,而不会质疑他是如何收到钞票的,因此可能因盗窃而被捕。事实上,纸币的价格太高,没有人有足够的改变来支付。当他将百万英镑的钞票带到餐厅时,经理为他感到难过,因为他没有任何变化,并免费给他吃饭。最后,在一次绝望的行为中,他决定看看他是否可以用这张钞票换一件便宜套装。当他掏出百万英镑的钞票付款时,商店经理给了他整个衣柜的信贷。人们认为亨利只是一个奇怪的百万富翁,并且自由地向他出售了货物。白天,亨利认为他可能在做白日梦。到了晚上,他几乎睡不着,因为他知道那张纸不是他的。最终,他成为伦敦的名人,被誉为“背心口袋百万磅”。在聚会上,亨利遇到了一个名叫波西亚的女孩。在故事结尾,她终于成了他的妻子。显然,他也意识到她是兄弟的女儿之一。最后,亨利通过投资获得了20万美元。在Henry和Pocia的婚礼当天,这部着名的戏剧性账单被挂在家中最神圣的地方。显然,他也意识到她是兄弟的女儿之一。最后,亨利通过投资获得了20万美元。在Henry和Pocia的婚礼当天,这部着名的戏剧性账单被挂在家中最神圣的地方。显然,他也意识到她是兄弟的女儿之一。最后,亨利通过投资获得了20万美元。在Henry和Pocia的婚礼当天,这部着名的戏剧性账单被挂在家中最神圣的地方。
这个故事中最有趣也最有趣的部分是描述在看到账单之前看不起他的人,以及在了解账单后他们的表现。看起来好像他周围的人的个性和行为仅仅因为财富的存在而改变了,这是B弟兄下注的。当我在四年级时,这些部分被包含在我的中文文本中。这就是我非常喜欢这个故事的原因之一。
当我读到马克吐温的故事时,我总是想到一句话“尴尬”。马克吐温批评人们和一些聪明而古怪的事情发生了。他的故事中的人总是“尴尬”。他们可能会被金钱和名气所吸引,但在一天结束时,这是愚蠢而无知的。例如,餐馆和商店的老板很尴尬,因为在看到钞票之前他们对亨利粗鲁。你必须嘲笑那些栩栩如生的人!
老师评语:
今天,Chassie和我讨论了她对马克吐温短篇小说“一百万英镑钞票”的分析。虽然她的散文几乎没有语法错误,但我们主要致力于提供更多关于实际故事的细节,包括角色进展,角色与书中其他角色的互动以及叙述性弧线。不要害怕包含尽可能多的细节,因为它肯定会吸引你的观众,并将它们放在关于故事进展的循环中。我们还研究了不同句子之间的转换,以改善整篇文章的流畅性,并展示马克吐温故事的运动。做得好!
这次作文准备不充分,老师改动添加的内容比较多,特分开存放,仔细体会学习下。